SDL Week 10 Narrative writing

 Monday 27 September 2021

WALT: Add descriptive features to my Narrative

On the weekend a Time traveler went on a vacation and suddenly both of the engines burst into flames. He heard a big boom! under his feet the plane crash landed on a Tropical island in the storage room where someone was keeping a cheetah and a wild cat.  The Time traveler is a 30 year old white man that likes to make new technology. He always wears a black and white suit. Scott is very nice back in America. He was famous for giving things to the homeless. He is very flexible so he can make his eyes and his chin touch his nose.  The wild cat has black fur and white eyes.  Fluffy has very bad behaviour. His fur is also very fluffy. I think that's why Scott named him that?  Scott doesn’t have enough wood to make a boat

The Time traveler mission is to build a boat and leave the island and have two new pets to protect Scott.  But the cat ended up attacking Scott. He looked around and saw a little bit of shade and a lot of food but he needed some surplus for the long journey.  He saw another tropical island but Scott decided to try to make the cheetah his pet. He tried feeling it by teaching the cheetah and playing with him. He has been on that island for a couple weeks.  He whispered to his cheetah and said “ it's time to move to that island. I'm going to name it free land or the land of the surviving i think that this land has lots of food and wood ?”  “Lets go swim across the water”  said Scott “We can get some fish to”  only if you want to come.  The cheetah just  nodded. Scott just remembered that cats hate water.  So he made a little raft that could fit the cheetah. Once they got to the island there was a camp surrounding food, wood, water and weapons. Scott

had an idea the cheetah would detract the worreos and Scott would get the things they need to survive on the survivors island.

Scotts favourite color is red and black and he goes nowhere without his suit case.  Scott is trying to get the other people off his island.  The solution was to scare the captain and make them go to another one.  How would you get the pirates of the island ?

Self assessment.

I improved my writing by.

• Writing more 

• Writing juicy sentences

• Finding good words

To improve my writing by.

had an idea the cheetah would detract the worreos and Scott would get the things they need to survive on the survivors island.

Scotts favourite color is red and black and he goes nowhere without his suit case.  Scott is trying to get the other people off his island.  The solution was to scare the captain and make them go to another one.  How would you get the pirates of the island ?

Self assessment.

I improved my writing by.

• Writing more 

• Writing juicy sentences

• Finding good words

To improve my writing by.

• Write more

• Find more juicy words

• Write more juicy sentences 

• Write more

• Find more juicy words

• Write more juicy sentences 

SDL Haka

 30/10/21

Back in time Te Rauparaha was a  Fearsome chief one day he was fighting his true enemies.  Te Rauparaha decided to go find another great tribe to help him fight. Te Rauparaha searched and came across Lake Rotoaira he pushed the wooden door open. Suddenly he saw chief Te wharerangi.

Te Rauparaha asked for protection Chief Te Wharerangi demanded Te Rauparaha to come hide in the potato pit.  Te Rauparaha Climbed into the dark gloomy potato pit Te Wharerangis people closed the potato pits cover.  Then Te Koaea came and sat in front of the potato pit's entrance.

Te Rauparaha heard the dark footsteps approaching the potato pit's entrance. He heard the dark voices of those that were trying to kill him. Suddenly he heard the footsteps fading, the voices got quiet.  Te Rauparaha was whispering to himself saying will I live? Will I live? Will I die? Will I die? When the footsteps were not heard Te Rauparaha emerged and returned home.  He told his journey to his tribe.  His story has passed through generations all the way to us  little kiwis.

Whiti Te Ra!

Spelling Week 10

 

Spelling, Week 10, Term 3, 2021
Monday	Monday	Tuesday	Tuesday	Wednesday	Wednesday
Spelling List words	Alphabetical order	Alphabetical order list words	Syllables	Alphabetical order	Guide words
minute  luckily  having  lightning holidays  language  hopped  breakfast hospital  instead	Breakfast Having Holidays Hopped Hospital Instead Language Lightning Luckily Minute	Breakfast Having Holidays Hopped Hospital Instead Language Lightning Luckily Minute	Bre - ak - fast Hav - ing Ho - li - days Hop - ped Hos - spi - tal In - stea - d Lan - gu - age Light - ning Luc - ki - ly Min - ute	Breakfast Having Holidays Hopped Hospital Instead Language Lightning Luckily Minute	brethren Hateful Hope Hopefully Hopeless inside landlady Like loyal Missing

Thursday - Alphabetical  Spelling List Juicy Sentences - Underline the spelling list word that is in you sentence

Every morning I eat my most favourite breakfast.

After school I like having a ride on my bmx.

On the holidays me and my Dad went to the beach and rode my motorbike.

I hopped in to the car because we were going to go to the beach

One time I went to the hospital for surgery.

Instead of me getting some lunch we went and got my ear pierced.  I learnt a new language and it was te Reo Maori.

On saturday I saw lightning outside striking our cows.

I  luckily  came  second in cross country.

10 minutes later I became a sparring opponent.

Identify Improper Fractions

 

SDL Week 8

 Success Criteria:

I have proof-read my writing to ensure I have:

• Juicy sentence starters 

• Correct punctuation - Capital letters, full stops, commas, speech marks, exclamation and question marks.

• A speech conversation in the body of my writing

• A simile in the body of my writing

• Read my writing to ensure it makes sense.

14 September 2021

WALT:  Follow the sequence of Narrative writing 

Introduction

At 8:00am  in a dark gloomy forest two little birds got picked up by the wind. They were on a hard  mission  to find a new home surrounded by predators.  One is named mascot and the other is blaze. They flew for a couple hours then landed on a tall and strong tree not a dot of  light shining upon them. Mascot is black and white he is also as brave as a lion and blaze is red with a pinch of black and a white lightning bolt on his side. Blaze is as cute as a chiwawa. There are very dark clouds and a drop of water drops from the sky.

Problem

Mascot  saw a storm heading right for them. Blaze was just in the air looking at the scorching hot sun.  Blaze noticed a tornado coming in the other direction; they panicked so bad that blaze dropped to the ground. Waking up with a huge shadow towering over blaze reaching to grab him, then mascot swooped down and hit hunter Jack. Jack fell over and soon noticed the tornado.  Soon the tornado swept up Jack swinging him in a sphere.  

Mascot had an idea he said to go back home to his mothers place.  When they got there the house was nowhere to be seen.  Soon

the hunter's brother sprinting to crush Mascot and Blaze.  Mascot said to Blaze “Let's split up and try to find mother if we don't find her to meet right here”   Days passed and they still hadn’t seen their mother.  They heard a sudden movement in the black berry bush and a stoat  leapt out of the bush. Thorns went everywhere shooting into the ground. Mascot and Blaze were trapped but the hunter came and blocked the thorns from getting them. 

Self assessment

What I like about  my writing:

•   I like the characters names

•  I liked the speech conversations 

•  I like writing about the Hunter

What i need to do to improve my writing:

•  Write more 

•  Keep on track 

•  Don't talk to other people when I'm working

•  Add more descriptive words and  write juice sentences

Narrative Writing

21\09\21

WALT: write a narrative that's amazing

One early morning Scott and Mascot went to the west coast and they met a teenager called chip. Scott is a five unicorn hydra and Mascot is a 20 foot tall wyvern chip is an adult wolf that likes to fight.   

Scott cant get something back that got taken from him by someone.

Problem\Solution

Scott mumbled to Mascot,All Mascot heard was let's go he was confused Scott noticed the chip stoll a special diamond from himself.  Mascot dashed on to chip and contained both arms and legs intal he was exhaust.  Chip was an expert at fighting so he took the diamond and spirited away Scott replied and told him to follow chips footprints.  Later that day they found a little hut with lots of diamonds there was a sign that said for theffs they were surrounded by Gigantic sand

Scott is the oldest and Mascot is the youngest Mascot is also stronger than the wolf The wolf is very weak.  Scott cant get his diamond back from the theff.  Scott called Mascot and whispered in his ear and said “follow chips footprints Mascot”. Do you think they could get the diamond faster ?

Self assessment

Today I improved my writing by

• Choosing better words

• Writing more than one paragraphs

• Writing more descriptive words

To Improve I need to:

• Remember to put a simile in

• Stop writing boring word sometimes

• Stay focused

 

Narrative Writing

 14 September 2021

WALT:  Follow the sequence of Narrative writing 

Introduction

At 8:00am  in a dark gloomy forest two little birds got picked up by the wind. They were on a hard  mission  to find a new home surrounded by predators.  One is named Mascot and the other is Blaze. They flew for a couple hours then landed on a tall and strong tree not a dot of  light shining upon them. Mascot is black and white he is also as brave as a lion and blaze is red with a pinch of black and a white lightning bolt on his side. Blaze is as cute as a chiwawa. There are very dark clouds and a drop of water drops from the sky.

Problem

Mascot  saw a storm heading right for them. Blaze was just in the air looking at the scorching hot sun.  Blaze noticed a tornado coming in the other direction; they panicked so bad that blaze dropped to the ground. Waking up with a huge shadow towering over blaze reaching to grab him, then mascot swooped down and hit hunter Jack. Jack fell over and soon noticed the tornado.  Soon the tornado swept up Jack swinging him in a sphere.  

Mascot had an idea he said to go back home to his mothers place.  When they got there the house was nowhere to be seen.  Soon they saw

the hunter's brother sprinting to crush Mascot and Blaze.  Mascot said to Blaze “Let's split up and try to find mother if we don't find her to meet right here”   Days passed and they still hadn’t seen their mother.  They heard a sudden movement in the black berry bush and a stoat  leapt out of the bush. Thorns went everywhere shooting into the ground. Mascot and Blaze were trapped but the hunter came and blocked the thorns from getting them. 

Amazon Forest - Narrative Writing

 22 September 2021

WALT:  Express myself in Narrative Writing

 

In the Amazon forest an angry bus driver was lost. He had been  before he ended up there he was plummeting to the surrounded by Gigantic trees towering over Scott. He heard a sudden crash knocking over  200 trees. He heard someone plummeting to the ground and she was screaming Help! From a far distance The bus driver heard spooky noises. 

The bus driver soon noticed trees crashing into the ground leaving the roots hanging on their side.  A tall tree nearly hit him. A lady tripped over a tree stump falling on to Scott. The driver then started yelling at her saying “What was that why did you bump into me you better say sorry young miss”! She just sat there and stared at Scott. Scott got annoyed and started to frighten her saying “stop staring at me young Missy”! She quickly looked away leaving a thought in his head. He whispered something to her. Scott said “Do whatever I say or I will leave you by yourself”. June was very frightened and did everything Scott called.  Scott steeped in some sloppy mud. Then Scott Said i'm as brave as a tiger he thinks.  

Scott and June are stranded on an island.  Scott has Black and orange clothes in June and is wearing Black and white clothes. They get lost again in the middle of nowhere. Do you think they can escape and the bus driver won't be angry anymore? Read more to find out.

Empowerment

 Today I learnt how to not Answer inappropriate texts and to not listen to bad people also when someone texts you something bad do not reply. Here is a copy of my slides.

Spelling Week 9

 

Spelling, Week 9, Term 3, 2021
Monday	Monday	Tuesday	Tuesday	Wednesday	Wednesday
Spelling List words	Alphabetical order	Alphabetical order list words	Syllables	Alphabetical order	Guide words
someone  everywhere hospital  sincerely  probably favourite  excited  chocolate  stopped tomorrow	chocolate excited every where favourite hospital probably sincerely someone stoped tomorrow	chocolate excited every where favourite hospital probably sincerely someone stoped tomorrow	Cho - co - late ex - ci - ted Eve - ry - where Fav - ou - rite Hos - spi - tal Pro - ba - bly Sin - cere - ly Some - one St - op - ed To - mor - row	chocolate excited every where favourite hospital probably sincerely someone stopped tomorrow	Childlike Exchange Evangelist Feast Hopeless Stove Tomahawk

Thursday - Alphabetical  Spelling List Juicy Sentences - Underline the spelling list word that is in you sentence

Me and my mum went to the Intermediate shop to get a box of chocolate.  I was so excited to eat the chocolate because I had not had it in a long time

Do you know that trees are everywhere on the planet?

My favourite thing is to go to jump with my whole family.

I went to the Hospital to have surgery. They put me to sleep and went to work.

I was probably too scared to go to the hospital because that was the first time time I watched a movie and one of the characters said “I sincerely want you to go away”.

someone looked at me and it was very very creepy. He had ripped clothes and dirty shorts.

He stopped looking at me and turned away like he did .

Tomorrow we will do the spelling test. I think I will do very well.